First of all, thanks for sharing!

I have downloaded the song (the flac version of course) :) and skipped through it.
It's still too soon to have a funded opinion about it, but I will reply soon, as soon as I listened to the track a couple of more times.

OK, listened some more to it and I think I can say some things about it now.

Disclaimer!: Everything below that may sound negative is meant as constructive criticism, of course. If I thought this track was a piece of crap, I wouldn't have taken the effort to write this post. :)

- I think the sound is a bit clean. That's probably due to the fact that it's a demo. I'd prefer it to sound a bit more 'alive', more 'natural'. F.i., this sounds a bit like a Larry Carlton studio recording, as opposed to a Led Zeppelin studio recording (the latter sounds a lot better, imho). It's a bit hard to describe but hopefully you'll know what I mean. But again, this is a demo, and demos normally sound a bit more clean than the final product. The drum machine also contributes to this clean sound.

- Speaking of drums: I didn't like double bass part. That's a matter of taste, of course, and I admit I'm never too fond of double bass (except when it really fits, like in some kinds of metal). But in this track I didn't really think it added to the atmosphere.

- You already wrote that some parts are quite repetitive. This could become boring after a while. It's a long track! :) But, you also said you're still working on lyrics. These "boring" repetitive parts seem to lack something, and I guess a melody line over these parts will improve it a lot.

- The guitar solos are very cool. The bass is very cool too, but sounds a bit too 'thin' for my taste. I like it when a bass sounds a bit fuller, heavier, "thicker", "fatter". The longer parts with the solos are very good and could have been even longer for me. :) Also the Thin Lizzy-like sounding double guitar solos are great.

- The rhythm and mood changes of the different sections are great.

- Some parts may differ a bit more in terms of dynamics - now there's not that much difference between certain parts, you could add some more excitement by using dynamics more. Not that there's no difference in dynamics at all, but the song might be better off if you'd use it more.

I'm looking forward to hearing this track played live, performed by musicians only (also a drummer), grooving on the solo parts, going on for 45 minutes or so. ;)

Again, thanks for sharing this with us!

I recommend all other users here to give this a listen. It's a great piece of work (in progress, which makes it even more interesting). I'm curious what other people think of it.

PitW, have you continued to work on this piece?

Why not take it to AirBorn and see how it evolves with the other band members' input?